Talk:Wolfgang Borchert
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Sorry, this is not my day. Could a native speaker please take a look at this? Get-back-world-respect 17:52, 28 May 2004 (UTC)
Okay. Some questions as I go -- Finlay McWalter | Talk 18:08, 28 May 2004 (UTC):
- "which he found hard to stand" - was it his being conscripted that he found hard to stand, or conditions at the front? (I'm guessing mostly the latter) Given that probably everyone found the eastern front hard to stand, we should say why he in particular found it problematic. Didn't like military life? Found the violence sickening? Or just general worn-down by the whole experience?
- "Borchert had conflicts with the Hitlerjugend" (btw, I think I'll change that to "Hitler Youth" and link to it, as it's usually called that in english). "had conflicts" is a bit unclear - was he in the HJ and didn't like it, or was he not in it, and got into fights with its members.
- "was affected by the Gestapo": again, a bit unclear. Arrested? Harassed? Beaten-up? Spied-upon?
- "He could flee..." "and marched home 600 kilometers" I take this to mean that he did flee, and did walk home, yes?
- "a specialized hospital in Switzerland" - I assume this hospital specialised in hepatitis, and that hepatitis was also his cause of death?
- is "statements endangering the country" the name of the actual crime?
- do you know anything about his family background - I find it makes the first sentence of a biography read well if it goes something like: "Born in Hamburg in 1921, the son of a Silesian accountant...". It's not necessary, but it gives us something to write about for the first 20 or so years of his life, which (for most people) is rather uneventful.
- if I read the Esperanto version right, wasn't his first theatre in Lüneburg?
- when did he enter the sanitorium (which month)?
Pfew. I'm done, I think (sorry, looks like I took "edited mercilessly" to heart). I think it reads okay, except for the "Borchert had conflicts..." sentence, which is abominable. -- Finlay McWalter | Talk 19:10, 28 May 2004 (UTC)
- Thank you very much for your help, I think you improved it greatly. Regarding the questions:
- "hard to stand" has gone, so that is solved.
- conflicts with Hitlerjugend means he was in but was disgusted by it, it was not easy to leave if you wanted but he managed to do so
- I have no idea why I wrote "affected".
- He did flee, and did walk home, yes.
- He was treated for the liver disease which was also the cause of his death, but I only know that the hospital was deemed to be better in treating the illness than others, I doubt that it was a clinic especially for people with hepatitis
- the actual name of the "crime" was "staatsgefährdende Äußerungen", which I translated literally
- he was the only child of regional author Hertha Borchert and teacher Fritz Borchert.
- As far as I know his first theatre was in Hannover and I do not know in which month he entered the sanatorium in Switzerland. Get-back-world-respect 20:42, 28 May 2004 (UTC)
Thanks for the info. I think I'm done now. I chunked it up into a pre-war, a war, and a post-war paragraph, which seems like a sensible idea. -- Finlay McWalter | Talk 23:38, 28 May 2004 (UTC)